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I have just revised a poem to include a Welsh reference. I hear the Welsh are especially adept at pointing out flaws. Have at it...
Valentines Day Tomorrow
Behind the Portuguese men-of-war
through their dragging tentacled rain
hides a hunchback moon.
On sloped cement the color of the storm
he turns the vice down
on something wrapped in a rag.
A spoon handle cut from its cradle
twisting it round to fit a finger.
The Welsh give wooden spoons
before engagement rings.
He teased, trying to milk
the silver spoon she found.
She turned it on him giving
the spoon with a well here.
Using the hammer to pound
the vice tighter to round out
the flat spots in the ring.
It is scarred by the pliers
he first tried. But it is
impossible to file them down
without losing the inscription.
Gone already is the t in "Eternally Yours".
Diolch David
Many thanks for submitting this excellent poem. Straight away I'd like to point out a technical flaw When you posted this poem ( which I'd very much like to be able to feature and propagate ) did you save it as a draft at any point? For some mysterious reason it has appeared on the site without appearing in the activity feed and sans viral tools! This makes life difficult promo wise and since it has happened a few times before I was wondering if you could let me know exactly what you did when you posted.