A pharmacy dragged me here,
Here, this shabby restaurant
with grimy teacups
and gnarled fingers.
Numb customers, staring into
the hardness of the world,
gray as the sky,
the plates before them,
tasteless as the food,
distant as the beaches the guidebooks promised.
There is an unadulterated moment
the cook sneezes in the soup.
Neither cruel nor prophetic,
a blemished fate of fortuitous seconds.
Three things weighing heavily on my chest this morning:
1. Trying out that 'Earth / Moon' phase thingee [ http://www.albinoblacksheep.com/earth-moon
] that I saw on the original post of this poem. Can't seem to get it work.
2. The poem; just like mine - weird indentations, line lengths, etc. I must be a poet too !
- that's two shifted, now to get this third one off: Oh! It's the elephant in the room!
Well, I'm a bit confused... What is that last smiley doing? Not sure I see many similarities between my poem and yours- the tones are so remarkably different and our forms have varied purposes. ... but to each his own. And sorry you couldn't get the moon phase app to work; that's kinda a bummer.
No need to be confused, Dianne. It is smiling! Why? - in anticipation of the predictable response(s) - and, a tongue in cheek makes a smile, or sorts!
[ No personal 'slight' intended; you happened to provide a 'case in point'. Thanks. Beside, it's nice to be nice, and a smile does that! ]
QED: (Latin for 'See, told ya so!')
1. My submittal has been 'officially' called 'a poem' - ergo . . .
2. Notwithstanding the emotion of tones and purpose of the forms, each contribution contains two fundamental elements . . . of a poem.
3. To each his(her) own - amen! My preference is toward symmetry - maybe one reason I don't like Picasso; though I'd like to own some! ; I do like Dali, so I guess I'm neither totally 'square' - nor a cubist. (Just love that emoticon!)
Lol. It is always nice to be nice, and I appreciate it.
Hahaha, so it's a tongue in cheek! I had no idea. What a crazy emoticon; I rather like it. :)
Out of curiosity, on the art preferences bit, who are your favorites (of the "well knowns," anyway)? I'm a Mucha/ Waterhouse/ Van Gogh sorta person... I wonder if such things reflect in poems. Probably. In some way.
First - I did like the words, the sentiment, the 'story' of your poem. I felt that I was sitting across from you at that awful grimy table. I have been to a few 'greasy spoons' in my time!
Of course my 'poem' was tongue-in cheek! I am aware that poems don't need to rhyme, have equal line lengths, etc. I know the importance of punctuation, particularly its effect in oral presentations. But, I AM deeply and genuinely mystified by the odd indentation that is frequently present - such that I almost caused my tongue to puncture my cheek in mimicry.
On the 'art preferences', I have to admit to not being conversant with too many - though I used to smoke Dutch Master cigars! It's more a case of which art work I do NOT care for:
Cezanne, Goya, Mucha, Waterhouse, Van Gogh, Gainsboro, Monet, Whistler, Mattise, Gaugin, da Vinci, Michelangelo, Raphael - and who is that other ninja-turtle?
I do like Dali (visited the museum in Tampa - or is it St. Petersburg - many years ago, much of Gaudi and I (inspite of earlier comments) do like some Picasso works - though there is also some of his that I despise!
So, now - I'm ready to be 'pigeon-holed'!